| Re: Description of an Eleasian Race. Critique? A nice description, certainly detailed and I didn't feel confused at any moment while reading it I don't think but it all sounds very Elvish. That's fine because many fantasy stories have some kind of race similar to what we would nowadays call an elf but I don't know how far you really want to take this. Try not to make them generic stock elves with a different name. The borderline xenophobia sounds good as well as their mysterious appearance which sounds very alien and eerie. All in all I like it though. |