| Re: Description of an Eleasian Race. Critique?
Your description is pleasant to read and suits the tranquil tone of a gentle forest people.
However, I found the mention of recessive genes rather jarring and out of setting, unless the beings in your world truly understand genetics you probably should be using such modern terms to describe them. I would have thought that merely acknowledging that there is some Aslain blood in the Glaiden would be enough.
A few questions about this race.
Do they worship? And if so what and how?
Do they have a warrior tradition or do they frown on violence?
Are they apolitical or is there some kind of ruling body?
Finally if you'd like some more ideas I'd recommend looking at the Lirin from Elizabeth Haydon's Symphony of the Ages series, (assuming you haven't already read it).
Good luck with this. |