| Re: The Lords of Winter
Now I'm a new boy on the block so feel free to etc...
One thing that jarred with me was the forty men being described as an army.
Unless there is a pressing reason to mention the number I'd just leave it out.
The men I have with me...
Or use the fact they are so few that even forty men would cause a lack of intestinal fortitude. If that was the intent didn't come across strong enough.
Even the army of forty men I have with me should be enough to...
Or
Even the free loading bunch of reprobates I have with me at the moment... |