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Originally Posted by SJAB  The thing is this the beginning of manuscript I am submitting seems to be causing a split, some agents are liking it, but still rejecting it. Others seem to dislike it to the point they are commenting on it. (A sort of victory, anyway, they took enough interest in the submission to say why they didn't like it) |
As an editor, I can assure you that any editor who bothers giving you feedback sees something in your writing. It's the ones we really don't like that just get the form rejection emails, because we can't find a single positive thing to say so it's best to say nothing at all
Disclaimer: Yes, some people send form rejection letters simply due to time constraints. Either way, the fact that you've gotten personalised rejection notifications suggests that you stand out from the crowd.
As for your first page: Purely based on your description I'd say ditch it. You should launch in with something that grabs your reader's attention. Disconnected voices and no protagonist to latch on to early on will convince most commercial readers to put the book back on the shelf when they read the first few lines to see if they want to buy your book. And editors who publish commercially viable product have to take that into consideration.