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Much better start, but there are couple of things, first is the head-popping. You are talking via Pelarus, using his thoughts, feelings, memories and observations to describe the scene, and progress to the action. Therefore you cannot step out into someone else head, and use them to describe the scene. Stepping into Mordrun and Talrus head would confuse people, you either has to separate these bit by one empty line or then give them own chapter. Rule of the thump, you have use a single POV throughout one chapter, and not switch in the middle.

The second thing is the lack of the description on why the mountain village people believe his is a special. Two lines is cool, but I as a reader, I want to know more about it.

The third thing is the use of the flashback (the child scene), it confused me as I was reading it happening in a present tense. Please, use a passive tense when you describe the flashback scene.

Otherwise, you are getting there. This is cool stuff, keep writing.