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timelord4 · 13th December 2007, 11:04 AM

Damiynn,

Do you have a tension chart? The reason I ask is that chapter 2 of the book should be reserved for tension building and ends with a cliff hanger. It's part of the hook from chapter 1. Chapter 3 is the tension slider and info dumps can come in then; more of a back story really. If I read this as chapter 2 and I had just paid money for the book, I may be a little disappointed. You notice how international authors have a tendecy to do this in books 9 and 10. That's because they can afford to, the public have already been snared. But it is a bit off-putting.

Seeing this is book 2, maybe you should also look at book 1. If you have any doubts about what I'm saying, log onto Hal Spacejock (Simon Hayes) at the top of the Chrons header page. Download his planner and add a tensioner to it. (It's free; YWrite3).

Info dumps definitely come after chapter 2, not before.

Hope you don't think I'm being abrasive, just trying to help you. If you're a serious writer, you'll need all the help you can get to get yourself published.

Hope it helps Damiynn and IMO only.

BTW ~ This chapter is a hell of a good chapter 3 or 4.

13th December 2007, 11:04 AM	#10 (permalink)
timelord4 The never on time lord Join Date: Jun 2007 Posts: 239	Re: Chapter 2 2nd book, Looking for mistakes, or weak parts Damiynn, Do you have a tension chart? The reason I ask is that chapter 2 of the book should be reserved for tension building and ends with a cliff hanger. It's part of the hook from chapter 1. Chapter 3 is the tension slider and info dumps can come in then; more of a back story really. If I read this as chapter 2 and I had just paid money for the book, I may be a little disappointed. You notice how international authors have a tendecy to do this in books 9 and 10. That's because they can afford to, the public have already been snared. But it is a bit off-putting. Seeing this is book 2, maybe you should also look at book 1. If you have any doubts about what I'm saying, log onto Hal Spacejock (Simon Hayes) at the top of the Chrons header page. Download his planner and add a tensioner to it. (It's free; YWrite3). Info dumps definitely come after chapter 2, not before. Hope you don't think I'm being abrasive, just trying to help you. If you're a serious writer, you'll need all the help you can get to get yourself published. Hope it helps Damiynn and IMO only. BTW ~ This chapter is a hell of a good chapter 3 or 4.