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Old 12th December 2007, 06:09 PM   #8 (permalink)
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Re: Chapter 2 2nd book, Looking for mistakes, or weak parts

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Originally Posted by Damiynn View Post
whith whom when your character is alone do you have dialogue with?
Answer: the character "talks" by thinking to himself, a method you've already used in the excerpt. You can place the info-dumpy stuff as thoughts, in italics, thus breaking up the text into smaller paragraphs. But don't give everything away at the start, even if it is the second book.
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